rust

tower tall idly breaks into the sky. first town seen.
ashen pagodas all hollows.
people here have long since left.
night falls. ghosts eat through shadows. two tailed cats dance, and dance.
i keep riding.

lantern light bobs across open plain.
trading post, nothing more.
few supplies taken, nothing more.
under fallen night only the stars watch my leave.
i keep riding.

comings together of oni and metal.
forgotten engagements taken by rust.
sunlight breaks on colossal forms and scattered metal.
galloping in and through mechanized shadow
i keep riding.

~~~

sorry about the lack of updates. have things going on. still writing though. and building giant robots. so there’s that. in any case you can play spot the pokemon/anime references.

and as usual, the song i was listening to as i typed this up:

video uploaded by user Maineutral

best theme song ever. and one of the most awesome animes ever.

it’s late where i am, so without further or do,  おやすみなさい.

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16 comments

  1. J Cosmo Newbery · July 27, 2014

    ‘Keep riding’ is good advice.

  2. katiemiafrederick · July 27, 2014

    Cool..structured images.. in your words..and always happy to share the songs that inspire others2..there is always room..for more inspiration..at least for me..:)

  3. Gay Reiser Cannon · July 27, 2014

    It’s like a night time western – do you know the American west?
    It’s quite vast especially the high plains that cross Nebraska, Kansas Texas and Oklahoma panhandles and New Mexico and Eastern Colorado – the earth changes color even at night – the moon turns tumbleweeds into ghosts. There are grain elevators and cotton gins casting darker shadows where horses shy even in daylight and most especially at night. There are smells of sage, osage, cactus, mesquite trees (which are small shrub like trees and thorny; they flower and produce beans which are inedible as beans although clever ranch women make jam from them). Your poem hints at these places, and as I know them my memory fills in the spaces. I invite you to see it – it is as good as any shown in Hayao Miyazaki’s great anime movies.

    • skyraftwanderer · July 27, 2014

      Only from films, which is a bit sad. But you do paint a great picture. Thank you for the wonderful comment.

      Also, if it would interest you, this is part of a series:
      https://kaneda18.wordpress.com/2014/05/30/again/
      https://kaneda18.wordpress.com/2014/05/04/riding/

      which i guess will stop when i run out of imagination or something.

      • Gay Reiser Cannon · July 27, 2014

        Thank you for the links. I will try to look at them as I have time. I thought you might enjoy a perspective of someone who grew up in what wasn’t still but not far removed from the wild west..there were lots of remanants left and lots of cowboys but very few indians as I came to know it – in its beauty and its darkness.

  4. Victoria C. Slotto · July 27, 2014

    Compelling ride you take us on. What a great theme to center on–rust. There’s an old truck parked where I walk the dogs that just begs to be photo’d and written about. And the rust…!
    Thanks for being here tonight.

  5. Mary · July 27, 2014

    I love all the images. Especially those in the first stanza…thinking about two-tailed cats dancing makes me smile.

  6. Grace · July 27, 2014

    Keep on riding and galloping night to sunlight ~ I admire the vivid landscape of the city in rust and metal ~

  7. Madhura · July 27, 2014

    I love it! Haunting journey.. yes, better to keep riding…

  8. Ginny Brannan · July 27, 2014

    Great imagery in this. Gives a feel of author Stephen Kings Dark Tower/Gunslinger series.

  9. scotthastiepoet · July 27, 2014

    Ambitious write – I enjoyed some of your fresh images here.. I will be back… With Best Wishes Scott http://www.scotthastie.com

  10. Millie Ho · July 27, 2014

    Cool dystopian poem.

  11. Ash · July 28, 2014

    Keep riding on the journey through varied lanscapes of life. Nice message 🙂

  12. bostonpoetry · July 28, 2014

    Yes, very dystopian. Perfect description for this great piece. Awesome word choices in this. I loved

    ghosts eat through shadows. two tailed cats dance, and dance.

    Best,
    Mike

  13. yelena · July 28, 2014

    wow..unique imagery and language all the way through the haunting verse. loved to read and re-read this.

  14. ManicDdaily · July 29, 2014

    Actually this feels like an eastern ride to me, through the orient– zen and the art of motorcycle maintenance while staying on the bike. Very interesting, thanks . K.

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