alterations

paper cranes sprayed across a wall.
two people saying everything without words.
under the glow of neon flares,
the ramen grows a little colder.

~~~

paper cranes fly on concrete.
lips move but say nothing.
ramen grows cold
under the neon deluge.

~~~

sprayed on concrete paper crane flight paths.
there’s two people without words saying everything.
neon dragons soak everything in rainbowed fires,
while under it all the ramen grows cold.

~~~

paper cranes cross over ramshackle brick work.
two people in an alley say it all with absent words.
under the great rampage of neon blazing
a bowl of ramen grows cold, and colder.

~~~

grey scale skies brightened by paper crane cross overs.
there’s a dialogue but no words leave lips.
bowls of ramen grow cold nearby,
as ten thousand neon tubes blaze, and blaze.

~~~

differences and stuff. brought on by a trip to liverpool. great city.

and the music listened to while typing this:

video uploaded by user ORANGINA0307

everyone likes jushin thunder liger.

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5 comments

  1. freyathewriter · June 5, 2014

    Different people, different conversations, or is this the evolution of how conversations change between the same two people over time? Fascinating to work out which, and meanwhile the cranes fly on!

    • skyraftwanderer · June 5, 2014

      Thank you.

      Truthfully, it’s just variations on the first poem. I write one version, and just see how many times I can change lines and such. But you can read them however you want. It’s all good.

  2. Audrey Howitt · June 5, 2014

    Isn’t it interesting how small changes can make such big changes in how a poem feels –I love that here–

  3. brian miller · June 6, 2014

    really cool take…and i like how you carry the elements through each of the stanzas….but each one is a little different circumstances…sometimes we can say everything needing said without ever using words…especially if it is someone we have that connection with…even still there are others you can read the air between and know everything you need….

  4. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) · June 6, 2014

    The words like paper cranes and the wordless communication.. A really original take.

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